I haven't put in my contacts, yet. Looks fine to me!And, oh, yeah, this is familiar! I can't watch Sherlock right before I revise, or my MC goes all stroppy and just a touch sociopathic.
LOL! Love this. Although personally I thought the first version was great. :)
I agree with Kristan. Why touch the first draft? Part of revising is knowing when NOT to revise. But I think it was worth it for this drawg. You crack me up!
Sarah - Woohoo! Pre-LASIK buddies 4eva! Strangely enough, I'm watching Sherlock (the BBC one, right?) AT THIS VERY MOMENT. I haven't the heart to watch the Reichenbach one yet, though. Meep.Kristan - Ha! Thanks! To be honest, only the first revision actually happened and it ended up shifting back to a version very similar to the first. With jetpacks. (Okay, maybe not. But I make no promises.)Bina - Hee hee...that's so true, though. I can get seriously carried away with my pretty editing pens. Thank goodness for crit partners!
I see your problem here. It's just impossible to revise when every version is FULL OF AWESOME.Read it aloud to Carolee, who also loved it! Andy wandered in at the tail end and asked, "What's a Frito?" (Parenting high five!)
Sooo obsessed with Downton Abbey right now! Sigh!
Marie: The Reichenbach episode is pure evil done very, very well.
DOWNTON ABBEY! OMG DOWNTON ABBEY! DOWNTONE ABBEY!!Two days until Sunday *squeal*ehem. Sorry got a little distracted there. But you should go with that draft (the one with the crumpets and talk of dashingness). Or better yet, write a seperate version of the book for every draft. They would all be awsome!
I haven't seen a "Raaarrr"...in ages! Love it!
This was HILARIOUS! If I'd have been drinking something when I read "chaotic neutral," it would be spewed all over my screen right now. Thank heavens I was too lazy to go refill my drink! Oh, my gosh. Have you seen THE GAMERS: DORKNESS RISING?
Charles - Aw, you're too kind. And HOORAY for Andy not knowing what a frito is!! I wish I could say the same for my daughter...at least she can't SAY it yet, though!Yvette - Isn't it just amazing?? When I grow up, I want to be Maggie Smith.Sarah - I've just heard it'll shake your faith in good and holy things. I'm a little nervous.Taryn - Squee! Awww, and I have to wait until MONDAY morning! Boo time zones!BJ - Yeah, I just had to throw him in there!Peggy - Ha! Yay for lack of drinks! And I've never seen GAMERS...but I just looked it up and found it on the production company's website. Saturday night movie! (whether Preston likes it or not!)
Macaroon crumbs. Classic.You should just watch Firefly ALL THE TIME. Then everything you revise will be AWESOME.
But I can't channel Whedon! He'll make me kill everyone I actually like!!
Hm, that's a good point...
ooh ooh, I want to try:Corporate Version:Kelly came into my office, "The meeting was great. You should have come. Thomas was there and his presentation was great."I pretending to be busy by opening a browser but ended up running a search on Dashing Thomas. I would have gone to the meeting but his new secreatry would have been playing footsie with him under the table."I was busy with these quartly projections"Kelly looked at my keyboard covered in Frito dust, "Oh I'm sure"Heimlich VersionKelly jerked her fists against my diaphragm, weeping, and yelling, "Why couldn't you have just come to the party, if you wanted to see Thomas?"Of course I was in no position to have any conscious thoughts at that moment.My head seemed to shake back and forth though as if to imply no I had a lot to do here. Really important stuff. A strong squeeze and the Frito dislodged itself from my windpipe and flew across the room.
OH MY GOSH. I'm dying here. Geoff, these are by far the greatest pieces of Corporate and Heimlich Fiction I have ever read in my ENTIRE LIFE. I would give you all my fritos if you'd write an entire book for me.
OMGOSH, you just KILL me!! This is so freaking awesome. I can't even stand it. *falls down*And yes, your crit partners are waiting! I can't even remember the last time I laid eyes on five pages of pure Criddle. WANT. NEED.
Haha brilliant. My worst was when I was watching a lot of Dexter and also reading the Mr Ripley books. I don't think my psycopathic middle grade novel will be a big seller...
Ha! Oh, Keri, you are the BEST. Trust me, the next wave of Criddle is coming at you soon (I hope)! And fingers crossed that I'll get some Keriann goodness back over the pond (wink wink nudge nudge hint hint.)And GF - Oh my gosh, that's hilarious! I would SO totally read that book. I'm just saying.
Your drawings are so delightful I wish to eat them. nom nom nom. With a side of Fritos, and a cake with the face of that praying mantis embedded in it. Oh, and a plastic unicorn on top of the cake with a saddle and bridle made out of FRITOS.
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